DLO: Google drawings
Room one have been writing with story starters recently and this is mine. You could also chose to draw a picture of the main point of the story and this is mine on google drawing.
Whats a story that you love to read?
Thursday, 26 March 2020
Story starter writing!
W.A.L.T: Write with a purpose!
I had stumbled across the mysterious circles in a clearing in the forest and watched as the deer approached them. With a slight twitch of its ears, the deer stepped indifferently through the first circle and vanished. Completely vanished into what looked like a mirror but it was in fact a portal! I rubbed my eyes seeing if I was imagining it but I wasn't. I got closer and closer but not to close because I didn't want to get stuck in the portal. All of a sudden I accidentally tripped on a root and got sucked in by the portal. When I was in the portal I was screaming like it was my last scream ever, although it felt like that. All that was happening was me falling it went on for so long. I came to the end and fell on my back I made a really good loud smack on the ground. Some time had gone by and I woke up I was confused but still stood up instantly. I saw that I was in the exact same forest and came back to the same spot where the portal was, I felt like I was dreaming nothing made sense. There was another portal so I went in that to see where that would take me. AGAIN it took me to the same forest so instead, I just decided to leave and try to forget about all of this. So I go the way that I came in to try escape, I got to the end of the forest and tried stepping out but I couldn’t there was something blocking me it was like a giant...BUBBLE!
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Kia ora Charlotte,
ReplyDeleteYour DLO was what got my attention and then brought me into your blog to read your story. You have written a really creative story and used some wonderful descriptive words especially indifferently.
My children laugh at me because one of my favourite books is The Gruffalo, although at the moment I am reading John Grishams books. What is your favourite book or author?
I have a plan each day and part of that is going to be commenting on some blogs each morning. Have you commented on any yet, it is a great way to stay connected with other people as well as making someone else's day.
Nga mihi,
Mark
Kia ora Charlotte,
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Mark, your DLO caught my eye! it stood out. Your character really had a challenging time, I would have felt just as confused. What will happen next with the bubble?
I really love how you have used your punctuation correctly! And have used all the required ones. Ka pai!