Wednesday, 15 April 2020

Quick Write!

                                           W.A.L.T:write for a sustained period of time.
“You can’t leave without me! Where are you going?” The words came out like a squeak; her throat felt tight as she struggled to fight back the tears that had begun to stain her pale cheeks. Without looking back they took of and you could only just see them in the distance.”What do I do” she shouted. The clouds started to move along in a click, They got darker and darker by the cloud. So she lay down in the tall prickly grass, while her eyes slowly shut. The girl woke up in the middle of the night to rain drenching her. Along with lightning and thunder, the lightning made it look like it was day time for a split second and then it went to pitch black. She started to walk into the trees for shelter, she got to the trees and tried making a hut out of sticks,leaves and branches. She didn't need to find a blanket or tarp of some sort because the dress she was wearing was so big that it covered her whole body. She woke up the next morning to a bright cheerful morning. She heard what was like a helicopter or a plane. She got up and started waving her arms all over the place trying to get the attention to the pilot. But she still couldn't see where the helicopter was. Then all of a sudden a bid loud helicopter comes up right behind her. Turns out it was the flying ship that had left her. The captain said hurry up get on the ladder the volcano is about to erupt.”volcano?” the girl said questionly as she starts to climb on the ladder. The girl gets onto the ship and asks why they all left her. The captain replies with “we thought that you were aboard the ship so we left quickly until when we had got home we realised that the princess wasn't with us aka you, so we turned around and came back”. “But why did you leave so quickly” the princess asked. “Because the volcano is about to erupt” the captain exclaimed. BOOM “uh oh its the volcano” said the princess. The captain went fast and faster until it was so fast you couldn't see anything. But the good news is they got home safe and sound.

1 comment:

  1. Oh my goodness Charlotte, I felt like I was there in your story as the girl. What a fantastic job! Ka pai for using such amazing descriptive language and detail. This has to be one of the best pieces of writing I have ever read!

    I challenge you to see if you can use paragraphs, that would make reading it a little easier (just makes it easier for the eyes).

    Keep up your fantastic work, I can't wait to see what you write next!

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