Thursday, 16 April 2020

Quick write!

                                          W.A.L.T: Write for a sustained period of time!
She pulled down on the chain with her left hand, steering herself towards her target.
It was supposed to be the most exciting birthday present ever; a hot air balloon ride. However, Alice had been hanging on for dear life for over 100KM (since the basket of the hot air balloon had fallen off). She was now getting used to steering the huge balloon by manoeuvring her body, leaning to the left or to the right. A big gust of wind comes and takes her up in the clouds as she was closing her eyes she went up up up. She was screaming as loud as a volcano erupting. She then started to blend in with the clouds. She had calmed down and took a big breath in and a big breath out. She puts her hand out to touch the clouds, she touched it and it felt like candy floss! She tried taking a big bite out of the clouds to see if it tasted candy floss. She took a big bite and it tasted like CANDY FLOSS! The little girl grabs the biggest handful of her life and stuffs her face with candy floss. Time went by and then the girl started to drop slowly down and further down. Thats when she realised she needed to stop having fun and be serious and try land perfectly. She tugged and tugged on the left chain trying to aim back to her parents, she tugged on the right and then the left and then right again. Until she was perfectly targeted where she wanted to go. She got lower and lower to the ground and then she started running and running. Her legs were moving so fast in the air you couldn't even see them. She touched down with people getting her of the swing she stopped and gave the biggest smile and a cute little laugh and told everyone about it.

2 comments:

  1. Hi Charlotte, I just want to say this is AMAZING. I love how you have used a simile when you compared her voice to a volcano. I also love how you added in the cotton candy clouds, I wonder if someone could make that real?

    Keep up your fantastic work. Very proud of you!

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  2. Wow Charlotte what a wonderful imagination you have. There is some really good descriptive language in the story. I really liked the sentence 'steering the huge balloon by manoeuvring her body'. I too like the idea of candy floss clouds. I'm wondering what title you would give this piece of writing?

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